Eleventh grade was a breeze. It almost seemed like after two years running around in a haunted house I was finally done. I spent the year laughing with friends and getting most if not all of my school work quickly. My favorite class was VA US history. My teacher would often tease me about how much of a history buff I was. This was the year everything fell into place and and the end of the horrorfest seem clear easy and in sight. The only thing hiding in the shadows trying to get me was the reading. None of it was hard of unenjoyable but it always seemed to me as though I could be doing or even reading something better. The Color of water was the easiest of them thought because while I didn't want to read it once i got into it reading was enjoyable. The worst was Of Mice And Men. I just didn't enjoy the storyline. Running past the monster I learned a lot about myself this year. Our life map project really forced me to look at who i was, what shaped me and what truly matters to me. This year was simply great.
Intro
The original assignment was to write about if technology helps our relationships or hurts them.I had to do a bunch of research for this paper but i thought it came out pretty good so I picked it
Technology and Relationships
The best way to explain how technology helps or hurts our relationships is found in an article online called Girl, put the phone down: the role of technology in relationships by Admin, in which she writes “I've said it regarding Facebook, and I’ll say it again: It’s not the technology; it’s how we use it. Facebook Doesn't Ruin Relationships, People Do.”. I could not agree with her more. The best example is Facebook. Facebook wasn't meant to be a drama filled website where people can be cruel heartless jerks to the ones they once called friend or where people can watch other’s post like they would watch some Spanish soap opera turned English. It was meant to be a place where friends and family could stay in touch even from across the country. So while technology can help relationships it’s often used to hurt them.
If people used technology right this would not even be a topic of discussion but people cannot be trusted to use technology. After all people would never say the stuff they say online to someone’s face. Dateline did a study on cyber bullying after a 12 year old girl killed herself because of it. What they found is that people will use technology such as the internet and chat rooms as a shield to protect themselves from the consequences of bulling. They can say whatever they want as mean as they want and they can do it anonymously, saving them from having to take up responsibility. This technology was meant for people to meet and talk to other people nicely. Yet some people use it to find and hurt their peers for no good reason.Another example people using technology meant to help relationships to hurt them is the iPhone’s ignore button. People will push this button and tell people that they cannot talk now but in truth they can they would just rather not. Cell phones are meant for people to be able to talk even though they aren't in the same room, to give you important information as soon as possible. It’s understandable to use this button when you can’t talk but when you can you are hurting the person who’s calling you.
In conclusion it’s not technology that hurts people. It’s the people who use technology that hurt people. We try to blame technology thinking what else is to blame? When the harsh truth is people can have a cruel spirit and will use whatever they can to hurt people.
Application
This piece of writing was unlike any other I had written before because there was very little guide lines and I was given a lot of free range with it. In college I will have a lot more freedom to write as I wish. The way I worked through this paper should be good to help me there.
Analysis
The pattern I used for this essay was example than expiation than repeat. The reason this pattern is there is because I found this to be the easiest way to get my point across. The results of the approach I used was very efficient because I said what I needed to say.
Evaluation
I did very well. The reason I did so well on it is that I worked very hard to create a well-researched paper. The things I need to improve on the most is editing. My strong point on this essay was the examples that had found. . My weakest point was the editing I made a ton of mistakes. We learned about how technology and relationships effect one another. I I did an effective job of portraying both how learned that.
Creation
Something I should do next time is careful comb through my paper for mistakes. I can use my data collecting skills to help decide important decisions by researching the subject. I would suggest getting a more solid outline for this paper to my teacher because it was hard trying to figure out what they wanted.